In the Shed

She rounded the corner and held her nose, trying to escape the smell. They’d have to clear this place out, she thought, sighing. A grimy toilet was inside the tiny shed.

She rolled up her sleeves, then paused. Maybe she’d ask her husband to do it. She hated cleaning out things and with her allergies, it was even worse.

She was about to turn back, when something caught her eye. She stepped inside the shed, looking into the dark space behind the toilet. She sucked in a breath.

There, lying in the corner, was the corpse of her long-lost son.

© 2017 *edited version*

Friday Fictioneers, 1 December 2017

20 responses to “In the Shed”

  1. You misdirect us nicely in the first part of the story, and then hit us with the reveal; that’s well done. I hope you don’t mind me pointing out, though, that you’re well over 100 words with this story.

    1. Dang, you’re right! I don’t know how I didn’t notice that.. Thanks for pointing it out 🙂

  2. *Gasp* oh my days slapped me straight in the chops with that one…. well twisted.

  3. Dear Fia,

    Welcome to Friday Fictioneers. I’m willing to bet you can easily edit out the extra 34 words. 😉 A horrible thing to find when cleaning the shed. Again welcome.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

    1. Thank you – it’s great to be here! You’re right, I think I could edit them out 🙂

      1. Go for it. It’s never too late. 😉

  4. A shock ending for sure. So many questions raised by this story. Welcome to Friday Fictioneers, Fia.

  5. Oh crumbs – what an ending!

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

  6. Welcome Fia! And yes… I, too challenge you to cut the extra words! 😀
    Fabulous story with a horrid discovery

    1. Thank you! I accept the challenge!

      1. Rock on! Will check back 😉

  7. Well written. There’s a whole story here that wants telling. He may have been long lost to them, but he can’t have been in that shed very long if she can still identify him.

    1. Interesting… You’re right. There’s a whole story in between him being lost to his parents and ending up dead in that shed. I wonder what it is.. *stares off into space, a half-smile on her face* This could be a good gem for a story!

  8. How on earth did he get there? This is the start of a detective story!

  9. That must be one of the worst shocks you can get… and then you wonder how it all happened.

  10. I can’t imagine finding the body of my son – never mind that it was in a outhouse. So very sad but well written!

  11. Horror, for sure. What an awful discovery. Poor woman

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