Twisted Mind

He stared up at the angels on the ceiling, awed by the magnificent masterpiece. The sudden footsteps startled him and he spun around.

“Gregor,” he said with a nod of his head, stepping forward, but not offering his hand.

The other let the outstretched hand fall back to his side.

“We spoke on the phone,” the man named Gregor said, nervously balling his fists, unsure what to say.

“Yes,” he simply replied. “You know what you have to do?”

He nodded, not wanting to admit that the task petrified him.

“Come back here in twenty-four hours when the deed is done. The body,” he said, almost as an afterthought, “dispose of that as you wish, but make sure no one finds out. Leave no fingerprints.”

Gregor nodded again, more eager this time, wanting to please his superior. “Of course, of course.”

Then he left the church, wondering what a sick mind would choose such as place to discuss details of a murder.

Back in his car, Gregor switched on the ignition and immediately radioed his real superior back at the FBI.

© 2016

FFfAW, Week of 05-24-2016

19 responses to “Twisted Mind”

  1. Awww! I love the twist! He “really” works for the FBI and not for the man that wants someone murdered! Love it! Great story!

    1. Thanks! Yup, undercover agent about to uncover some planned murders 😉

  2. Josslyn Rae Turner

    Great suspense!

    1. Thank you!

      1. Josslyn Rae Turner

        You’re welcome! 🙂

  3. Oh I’m glad Gregor was a good guy. I would wonder why another man would want to order a murder in a church too. Well done 🙂

    1. I’m glad too! Yeah, it’s not much of an ideal place, is it? Thank 🙂

  4. Very well written! Really enjoyed reading it! ☺

    1. Thank you! I’m glad you did 🙂

  5. Oh, a good, suspenseful, thriller-detective story that promises to be action-packed! Nicely written dialogue.

    1. Definitely invites me to write an action-packed continuation… Thank you!

  6. Clever twist, nicely played 🙂

    1. Thanks! 🙂

    1. Thank you! I accept, and am looking forward to writing my response. 🙂

      1. wwwpalfitness

        You’re welcome. I look forward to your answers.:)

  7. Hi Felicia, lovely to meet you. I found you through Paul’s Especially epic award for epic awesomeness x Congrats on your award.

    Great writing going on here!

    1. Hi Daisy, nice to meet you too! Thank you – I’ll be posting my replies shortly. 🙂

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